The first basic rule of good description is keep it original - do not use cliches. Good description also depends on imagery. Make sure your diction is interesting and specific. We also discussed what makes a good analogy - similes and metaphors. Compare two ideas that are different but related in some way. Don't compare apples to apples, but don't compare an apple to an elephant unless there is a connection. Make your analogies detailed, but don't get carried away.
Your task is to write a paragraph describing the character in the picture. Consider this an excerpt from your latest best-selling novel. It needs an interesting introduction and a concluding sentence, but the emphasis is on description, not plot. Include one or two similies and one or two metaphors. Your description should follow some sort of logical order, top to bottom or bottom to top.
Student example: Note- too many sentences begin with "His" - a common weakness.
I thought I had escaped. The noise of his boots cut through the silence that surrounded me. I turned my head around to see his old, worn out hat sliding down, shadowing his face. His eyes were deep holes, burying down to his skull, staring at me. His shabby jacket smelled heavily of cigarette smoke and whiskey. He held his guns with great confidence, like nothing he could do, could go wrong. His skin red and rough from the elements of the earth around him. His beard was like brown grass sprouting from his cheeks. His eyebrows were like two cateripillars crossed over his eyes, raising slightly as they glazed my way. His jeans were worn and dirty, hanging from his waist. He cornered me against a barrel and the gun was held to my face
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